만일 모든 사람이 항상 진실만을 말한다면 이 세상은 좀더 좋은 세계가 될 것인가? 독서, 학습, 경험 또는 관찰에서 얻은 논리와 예를 가지고 당신의 주장을 입증하시오. - SAT Essay
[학생 작문] Generally, we have been taught that  truth is good and  lie bad. It is true that  lie does have a negative impact on our lives. However,  lie is necessary sometimes. If everyone started to tell  complete truth,  the world would be in disaster. Especially, the national security and areas that are based on secrecy  will fail miserably.
 The national security would be crippled if everyone told the complete truth.  The revealing of military strategic point and amount of weapons that one country has will provide  organizations or other nations  that might have considered attacking the country  strategy on how to attack successfully.  If everyone started tell complete truth, then  social order would  not exist. For example, what if some high government officials  told on television that  the bomb has been planted in  metropolitan area or an airport? The people  will become  restless and worried.  Apparently, too much honesty in the field of the national security  will be detrimental.
The competition between companies that drives  the capitalistic society  will be undermined, which  will result in retardation of economic growth.  If employee or researchers at a prominent  company  tells other employees or researchers  the secret ingredients  that go into the soup can, not only  will be the taste of soup  same and monotonous, but also companies that used to try to compete with a leading company  will stop trying. The lack of competition  will then result in  uniformization of price and of quality of product. The market, then,  will be companyoriented not consumer oriented, because companies  aren’t competing each other for consumers’ attention.
In general, telling a lie is a bad thing. Lying to  mom about  test score or lying to  dad about a stolen car, are condemnable. However, if everyone started to tell  complete truth, then some aspects of our lives  will be disastrous. The national security  will fail and  will bring social disorder.  The economic competition  will disappear and  will result in retardation of economic growth. Perhaps it is true that there is such a thing as too much honesty.
Comment : Very good! You thought about it carefully and wrote a decent essay. I’m afraid that what you write does not correspond to the reality of economics, but that is beyond the scope of this evaluation. Suffice to say that it was a good effort.
You have a good vocabulary and some of your sentences are excellent. Only, the things to watch for are 1) articles like “a” and “the” and 2) use of “would” versus “will”. Since you are speculating or imagining what WOULD happen, you should use the verb “would” not “will.” WILL implies that this will definitely happen in the future since it is a certainty. Since you are hypothetically imagining a world where everyone tells the truth, this WOULD be the result, not WILL.
매우 잘 쓴 에세이입니다. 주제에 대해 세심하게 생각하고 글을 쓴 것이 드러납니다. 당신이 쓴 글이 경제의 실제적인 면과 일치하지 않는 부분이 있어 아쉽지만, 에세이 평가기준 영역을 넘는 내용이므로 여기서 평가하지는 않겠습니다.
당신은 상당한 수준의 단어 실력을 갖고 있고, 당신이 사용한 몇몇 구문은 상당히 좋습니다. 이 에세이에서 주의를 기울여야 할 부분은 관사인 ‘a’와 ‘the’의 사용, 시제의 문제인 ‘would’와 ‘will’의 용법입니다. 어떤 일이 일어날 것인지 추측하거나 상상할 때는 미래시제를 나타내는 조동사 ‘will’ 대신 ‘would’를 사용해야 합니다. ‘Will’은 앞으로 일어날 확실한 미래를 암시합니다. 당신은 모든 사람이 진실을 말하는 가상의 세계를 다루고 있기 때문에 will이 아닌 would 를 사용해야 합니다.
주간동아 596호 (p92~93)