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연방주의자와 反연방주의자 차이점은?

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연방주의자와 反연방주의자 차이점은?

연방주의자와 反연방주의자 차이점은?

미국 이루넷아메리카 보딩스쿨의 수업 장면.

[문제] Federalist vs Anti-Federalist: What are the differences in their ideologies? How did these two groups develop/change up through the 1820s? How did they affect the development of government · its policies?

연방주의자 대 반(反)연방주의자, 이들의 이데올로기에는 어떤 차이점이 있는가? 이 두 그룹은 1820년대를 어떻게 개발시키고 변화시켰나? 이 두 그룹은 정부와 정부정책의 발달에 어떻게 영향을 끼쳤나? - 미국 고교 역사시간 에세이 숙제

[학생 작문] After [1] the independence from [2] the Great Britain, [3] United States had to govern its own people. To develop as a country, its first task was to establish regulations and make a concrete government. However, different states had different needs and wants, so uniting as [4] a one nation did not come easy. [5] As setting up the government, two major [6] politic groups [7] arouse called [8] Federalist and Republican, [9] also known as Anti-Federalist.

[10] Federalists wanted to [11] strong central government that could control state power. On the other hand, [12] Republicans feared [13] the central government [14] becoming too strong. They wanted [15] states to keep their power and rule their own people. [16] Republicans supported [17] Amendment of Confederation which [18] blocks the central government [19] to collect tax from the states. [20] Federalists endorsed the constitution which [21] gives more power to the government including the power to collect [22] tax from the states freely. [23] Republicans and Federalist compromised and added [24] Bill of Rights [25] protected individual’s freedom from the government. [26] Supporters of the constitution were called Federalists, and the opposition were called Republicans, Anti-Federalists.

Then, a strong Federalist leader Hamilton played a crucial role in America’s economics. He suggested fundraising 54 million dollars by selling securities to [27] the wealthy merchants [28] in honor of Revolutionary debt, [29] raising taxes, and to create [30] 20 year chartered Bank of [31] U.S. Republicans detested Hamilton’s policies because most opposed taxes and banks, which [32] helps the growth of the central government. Also, Hamilton stressed the importance of industry, and because most Republicans were Southerners (farmers), they [33] were not delighted. [34] Second President Adams continued [35] Federalist ideas. He affirmed [36] Alien and Sedition Act which mainly targeted [37] opposition party by hindering freedom of speech. [38] Republicans argued by [39] Kentucky and Virginia Resolution that [40] Alien and Sedition Act [41] is against the constitution.



The turning point [42] for the political power was when Jefferson became [43] the president. He was a strong Republican who rejected Hamilton’s policies. However, the Bank of [44] U.S. survived. He tried to [45] raise state’s power in many ways. He purchased Louisiana, so the farmers [46] have more land to farm, and the [47] state gains more power. [48] The next president Madison was also a Republican. The war of 1812, which was during Madison’s presidency, had three major effects. [49] First was, the Federalists were out of the power. [50] Second was Republicans came to believe the nation was strong. [51] And lastly, Republicans accepted [52] Federalist’s ideology. [53] Federalist’s and Republican’s ideology were coming together.

The Hartford convention was [54] Federalist’s last attempt to redeem the power, but it failed. Since there was not party to compete, [55] the unity became less important, and the internal conflict in [56] Republicans arose. This eventually [57] leads the division of Republicans.

[58] Republicans ceased power overall, [59] but in the long run, Federalist’s ideas survived. [60] Both parties contributed the development of the United States to become a strong nation.

첨삭

[1] → gaining independence [2] the 삭제

[3] the 삽입 [4] a 삭제 [5] → While establishing

[6] → political [7] → formed

[8] → the Federalists and the Republicans,

[9] → who were also known as the Anti-Federalists.

[10] The 삽입 [11] a 삽입 [12] the 삽입 [13] that 삽입

[14] → would become [15] the 삽입 [16] the 삽입 [17] the 삽입

[18] → blocked [19] → from collecting taxes [20] the 삽입

[21] → gave [22] → taxes

[23] → The Republicans and the Federalists [24] the 삽입

[25] which 삽입 [26] 삭제 [27] the 삭제

[28] → for the Revolutionary debt, [29] → and raising taxes to create

[30] a 삽입 [31] the 삽입 [32] → helped

[33] → strongly opposed his policies,

[34] → The second president, Adams, [35] the 삽입 [36] the 삽입

[37] the 삽입 [38] the 삽입

[39] Kentucky and Virginia Resolution: It’s confusing because you use ‘argued by’ and this can only be done by people.

[40] the 삽입 [41] → was [42] → in the struggle for [43] the 삭제

[44] the 삽입 [45] → increase state’s powers [46] could 삽입

[47] → states gained [48] → The next president, Madison,

[49] → The first was that the Federalists lost all of their power.

[50] → The second was that the Republicans

[51] → Last, the Republicans [52] the 삽입

[53] → In time, the Federalists and the Republicans were able to form a balance in their ideologies.

[54] the 삽입 [55] the 삭제 [56] → the Republican Party

[57] → led to a division in the Republicans.

[58] → The Republicans forfeited all power,

[59] → and in the end, it was the Federalist’ s ideas that survived.

[60] → However, both parties greatly contributed to the development of the United States in becoming


[Comment] Overall, your essay is very good. There are some parts that have gaps which affect the flow of your writing, so try to be careful to include all of the information that you need. Your organization is good and you have a good variety of sentence structure. You still have some problems with grammar but keep practicing and this will improve. I think the way that you concluded your essay is very well done.



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