[문제] Is there anything you would like us to know about you or your academic record that you have not had the opportunity to describe elsewhere in this application?
어린 시절 기른 창의력은 삶의 중요한 자산이 된다. 미국 링컨센터 인스티튜트의 창의력 기르기 강좌.
원서에는 쓰지 않았더라도 당신이나 당신의 성적에 관해 더 알려줄 것이 있는지요?
- UC Berkeley 입학원서
[학생 작문] I was born the eldest daughter of my father who  was going to college in Illinois and my mother who  graduated in industrial design  major. When I was a little girl, I could not go anywhere without  her. Under her  guide, I learned violin and piano and finally became an orchestra leader, representing about 1,000 students in my elementary school. It was my first leadership  which turned me into a different person. I was no  more a shy and quiet girl who needed to be with her mother.
My dad  who had an architecture and theater business always wanted my sister and me to study in America. With my family background  that relates to arts, I  wanted to create  arts that can be adapted for an actuality, which my mother did. Therefore, as a freshman I started my new art school life in America. To adjust  new environment,  friend and culture  for myself was difficult enough, but I had to take care of my little sister, as well.  Depending and supporting with her, I was able to overcome the adversity.
Moreover, because I spent much time on arts,  besides on regular class works, and I  have been in America for a very short time, it was hard  to me to complete my English skills. When I was a freshman, I was  the beginning ESL(English Second Language) student, but with hard  working, I was able to graduate  ESL course in one year; moreover, I  got awards as an outstanding student. I , however, still  had to struggle with  the English tests, such as  SAT or literature classes. I tried my best to overcome the wall of English, and I am sure that  if I will eventually improve  my ability of English. Math, however,  my strength, so I completed all of  math courses in  the school, and I was  math tutor for some students. I was also teacher assistance for  Algebra 2 class.
One of the advantages of going to art school was that I often had a chance to  have an art show which was a very good empirical exercise. In my junior year,  by one of my art teachers’ requests, I  had my own art show in  the town .  It was really successful in a way that I put more efforts, because I had more responsibility. In addition, I contributed some of my  work pieces to  art sale which was held  in every end of the school and donated some  money that I earned to  community.
Moreover, being a prefect has changed my personality  having more leadership. To be a prefect, I had to  get my recommendation from several teachers, write an essay, and  have an interview with faculties. It was really competitive, but I was accepted. I was the only one  who was an international student among  American prefects. Before school started, all prefects had to be  there earlier than any other students and had  trained: how to respect, mediate and lead students as a leader of the school. As I was in charge of the school, I realized that I  have changed.  Making an announcement in the all school meeting, organizing communities, guiding new students, and helping faculties  , I have much leadership with me.
I love where I am and what I  do. Not only is a major in a certain field important, but also other fields that I have not experienced before, because I believe that everything  is from a composite art. Rather than staying in high school,  involving just art and technology, I would like to stand in the middle of the university where there are talented people in a variety of fields. Then, using everything I have learned and experienced in the paradise of arts, I will  expand my dream.
[Comment] Very good. For the sake of space, I cut out a lot, but it’s mostly just minor grammatical errors. I think you explained your weakness with English in an adequate way, but were quick to point out that you have hidden art and music talents. Hopefully, the admissions committee will see this!
매우 잘 쓴 글입니다. 지면상 많은 부분을 삭제했지만 문법적 오류는 적었습니다. 당신이 구사하는 영어에 대한 약점을 적절하게 설명했으나 당신의 예술적, 미술적 재능은 지나치게 짧게 언급했습니다.
주간동아 618호 (p96~97)