[문제] Does Progress depend on people with new ideas rather than on people whose ideas are based on the current way of doing things? Plan and write and essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.
혁신적인 아이디어로 사회의 진보를 이끌었던 토머스 에디슨.
진보는 현재 방식에 기초한 아이디어를 가진 사람들보다 새로운 아이디어를 가진 사람들에게 더 의존하는가? 독서, 학습, 경험 또는 관찰에서 얻은 논리와 예를 가지고 당신의 주장을 입증하시오.
-SAT Essay 주제
[학생 작문] Today, we are living in  the place where we can rapidly contact  to each other easily. There are  plenty of convenient  instruments which  help our daily  life.  Then, how the new instruments could be invented?  People like Edison and  Light brother who had always come out with the new ideas that other people haven’t thought of made it.
To progress  with depth, looking at things from new points of view is very important. Of course, people  based on the current way  can lead the companies or groups, but  they can never make new impressive ideas. Edison  is a good figure to show who was very creative and had questions on everything he saw. Having attended only elementary school, Edison was not  the ideal person for the normal community. He was somewhat different from other children. He  asked his mother, a school teacher,  everything including things  which we think of as stupid questions. But with  the different view from others, Edison later invented so many useful things that  can help our lives. He not only invented filament for the electric bulb, but also  gave hints to future generations to make a telephone.
 Light brother is another good example  of proofing that new ideas can make a huge progress.  When other people didn’t try to make the plane but just wanted to play with toy plane, Light brother actually tried to make things to fly. Light brother, inventors of the first air plane, had failed lots of times to have success. Finally, they made a plane which is very needful instrument.
Not only  Edison  helped and improved out lives, but also  there are so many scientist, artist, or in any people from entire fields, helped our lives by  coming up with the new ideas.  When people satisfy with their current way of doing things, they can never  grow up and improve.  Having a new sight on things and thinking differently, we can easily  make progress and achieve huge advancements.
[Comment] The ideas and examples that you used in your essay are very good, so you successfully support your opinion. However, you have a lot of problems with the way you expressed your ideas. As you can see, I corrected about half of your essay. Really pay attention to how I have corrected your sentences and work hard on improving your sentences skills.
에세이에 사용된 아이디어와 예제들은 매우 좋다. 그것들이 글쓴이의 의견을 잘 뒷받침하고 있다. 그러나 아이디어를 표현하는 방식에 문제가 많다. 에세이의 절반 가까이를 수정했다. 문장을 어떻게 바꾸었는지 잘 살펴보고 문장 구성력을 높이기 위해 더 노력하기 바란다.
주간동아 607호 (p96~97)